FYS 251

Spectacles of Blood:

Roman Gladiators and Christian Martyrs

Editing Report Page


Title of the paper you are editing: _____________________________________________

Author of the paper you are editing: ___________________________________________


Paper Form Analysis:

(ten points deduction for each failure to comply with formal requirements)

Title: Does the paper have a title that relates to the content of the paper? _______ (yes/no).

 

If yes, why is it a good title?

 

If not, how could the author improve it?

 

Page Numbers: Does the draft have consecutive page numbers on each page? _______ (yes/no).

Cover Page:

Does the draft have a cover page? _______ (yes/no).

Does the cover page include:

  • The author's name? _______ (yes/no).
  • The paper's title? _______ (yes/no).
  • The paper's word count? _______ (yes/no).

     

Word Count:

Does the draft cover page include a word count? _______ (yes/no).

Is the word count between 1400 and 1600 words? _______ (yes/no).

Bibliography:

Does the draft include a bibliography page? _______ (yes/no).

Does the page include all the works referred to in the text of the paper? _______ (yes/no).

Is the citation form of the bibliography accurate? _______ (yes/no).

Form Grade Calculation:

How many points, if any, would you deduct from this paper for formal deficiencies? _________

 
Paper Content Analysis

 Thesis and Argument

Is the author's thesis interesting? _____ (yes/no)

Why or why not?

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Is the author's thesis clearly stated in the first two paragraphs? ___ (yes/no)

What suggestions do you have for improving the author's statement of his/her thesis?

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Does each paragraph contain a topic sentence? _____ (yes/no)

If not, identify the paragraphs (i.e, tell me the page and paragraph number) that do not state a topic sentence and suggest a topic sentence for the paragraph.

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Does each topic sentence develop the points of the author's argument in a clear and logical fashion? _____ (yes/no)

If not, suggest a better organization of points (and thus paragraphs) for the author.

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Does the author use paragraphs that make more than one point? _____ (yes/no)

Identify those paragraphs and mark on your copy of the author's paper where you create new paragraphs.

 

How many points, out of 25 total points, would you give the author for his/her thesis and argument? _______

Use of Evidence:

Does the author adequately cite primary and secondary sources? ____(yes/no)

Does the evidence the author offers further his/her argumentative point (i.e., do you understand why the author used the quote and does his/her use of the quote convince you) ____ (yes/no)

If not, identify each occasion where the author's use of a quote is ineffective and explain why.

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Are there occasions in the author's argument where you feel that he/she has failed to supply evidence which you need? ______(yes/no)

If so, identify these occasions, and explain why evidence would be helpful. If you can suggest evidence from readings we've done, do so.

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How many points, out of 25 total points, would you give the author for his/her use of evidence? ________

 

Grammar and Syntax:

Identify every grammatical error you have found on your copy of the author's paper (and be sure to give the paper to the author after class to help his/her rewrite). How many errors did you find? _________. How many points should the author lose for grammar and syntax (if any)? _______.

Identify every spelling error you have found on your copy of the author's paper (and be sure to give the paper to the author after class to help his/her rewrite). How many errors did you find? _________. How many points should the author lose for spelling (if any)? _______.

Circle instances of poor word choice (both ten dollar words and slang) on your copy of the author's paper (and be sure to give the paper to the author after class to help his/her rewrite). In the margin, suggest alternatives for the author's word choice.

In each paragraph, look carefully at the length and grammatical structure of each sentence. Identify sentences that while grammatically correct, would benefit from editing or expansion. Suggest improvements.

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Circle every passive verb the author has used. How many times has the author used the passive voice? ____

How many points, out of a total of 25 points, would you give the author for grammar and syntax?

 

 


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